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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 3

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 3 a3xX
Hi Thomas and Eva, I am so glad to hear from you after almost a month. Thank you so much for sending me the pictures of the vacation. They are all just so amazing, especially the one where I am standing on the cliff, though our group picture at your home is my favourite. I cannot thank you both enough for being such warm hosts during my stay in Berlin. I am glad I chose to stay at your place rather than a hotel. I could have never imagined that staying at your place would become the best part of my trip to Germany. The way you guided me about local off-beat places, and the local eateries I should explore, it gave me an experience for a lifetime. Though I clicked lot of pictures with my camera too, it was running at the back of my mind that if I had missed anything, but was captured perhaps by your camera. Receiving those pictures today from you was totally unexpected and of course, surprising. I feel compelled to say that all pictures are so beautifully captured and kind of contain a happy vibe. I find myself very fortunate that I chose to visit your city this summer. Please try to visit my country India too, whenever you get time. I would love to take you around and try to reciprocate the similar warm hospitality. Thanks again for the pictures and lovely time in Berlin. Yours lovingly, Somya
Hi Thomas and Eva,

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glad to hear from you after almost a month. Thank you
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much for sending me the
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of the vacation. They are all
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amazing,
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at your home is my
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I cannot thank you both
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for being such warm hosts during my stay in Berlin. I am glad I chose to stay at your place
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than a hotel.
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could have never imagined that staying at your place would become the best part of my trip to Germany. The way you guided me about local off-beat places, and the local eateries I should explore, it gave me an experience for a lifetime.

Though I clicked
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lot of
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pictures
with my camera too, it was running at the back of my mind that if I had missed anything,
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but
was captured
perhaps by your camera. Receiving those
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pictures
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from you was
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unexpected and
of course
, surprising. I feel compelled to say that all
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pictures
are
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so
beautifully
captured and kind of contain a happy vibe. I find myself
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fortunate that I chose to visit your city this summer.

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Please
try to visit my country India too, whenever you
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time. I would
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to take you around and try to reciprocate the similar warm hospitality.

Thanks again for the
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pictures
and lovely time in Berlin.

Yours
lovingly
,
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Somya
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IELTS letter Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 3

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  American English
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245 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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