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You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Say who you are and where you found your pen pal's address. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. Indicate that you would like a reply.

You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Say who you are and where you found your pen pal's address. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. Indicate that you would like a reply. KO26
Dear Pen Pal, Hoping this letter finds you in good health. My name is Uzair Patel and I live in Dubai. While surfing on the “Jamming” website your profile caught my eye, we share many common interests and hobbies. Since your address was on the site, I decided to write as I believe we can get along well. Let me start by telling you about myself. Academically, I have a master’s in the field of computers and presently I work as an Information Systems Manager with a family-owned business group. I have a plethora of pastimes which are hiking, traveling, music, and collecting gadgets to name a few. I am sure this must have created curiosity as these are your interest as well. I have a conference coming up on 15th April 2021 at a place near to you in Doha. Although it is a business trip, there will be sufficient time in the evening for myself. It would be great if we could meet up and maybe you can show me around. I presume the weather will be hot for going out, nevertheless, I am sure there will be ample of places to visit indoors. Looking forward to your reply, and I am excited to see you. Yours truly, Uzair
Dear Pen Pal,

Hoping this letter finds you in
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good
health. My name is
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Uzair
Patel and I
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live
in Dubai. While surfing on the “Jamming” website your profile caught my eye, we share
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many
common interests and hobbies. Since your address was on the site, I decided to write as I believe we can
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get
along well.

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Let
me
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start
by telling you about myself.
Academically
, I have a master’s in the field of computers and
presently
I work as an Information Systems Manager with a family-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
business group. I have a plethora of pastimes which are hiking, traveling, music, and collecting gadgets to name a few. I am sure this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have created curiosity as these are your interest
as well
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a conference coming up on 15th April 2021 at a place near to you in Doha. Although it is a business trip, there will be sufficient time in the evening for myself. It would be great if we could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
up and maybe you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
me around. I presume the weather will be hot for going out,
nevertheless
, I am sure there will be ample of places to visit indoors.

Looking forward to your reply, and I
am excited
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you.

Yours
truly
,

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Uzair
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IELTS letter You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Say who you are and where you found your pen pal's address. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. Indicate that you would like a reply.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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