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Job application letter write a letter to get a new job at beauty salon

Job application letter write a letter to get a new job at beauty salon KnOa1
Dear Sir or MadamI am very interested in your advertisement on your Instagram account and I would like to apply to be a member of your beauty salon AlphaI am twenty eight years old and I have recently graduated in cosmetology from the Akfa university. In addition, I also hold a grade 2 certificate in beauty consultation and hair dressing as per the lastest trends. I am proactive and I have a delicate taste simultaneously. I work tirelessly on myself and never get tired of triying new make-ups. I enjoy several domestic chores such as cooking delicious meals and tidy up rooms. As well as i am very hard working and aociable and I can get on well with new people easily. If you would like me to attend an interview I would be able to come at any time convenient to you, as I do want to be a member of your beauty salon Alpha. Faithfully Simona Addison
Dear Sir or
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MadamI
am
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very
interested in your advertisement on your Instagram account and I would like to apply to be a member of your beauty salon
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AlphaI
am
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twenty eight
years
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old
and I have recently graduated in cosmetology from the
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Akfa
university.
In addition
, I
also
hold a grade 2
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certificate
in beauty consultation and hair dressing as per the
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lastest
trends. I am proactive and I have a delicate taste
simultaneously
. I work
tirelessly
on myself and never
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get
tired of
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triying
new
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make
-ups.
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I
enjoy several domestic chores such as cooking delicious meals and tidy up rooms.
As well
as
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i
am
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very
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
and
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aociable
and I can
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get
on well with new
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people
easily
. If you
Consider removing 'would'. (Usually, 'would' does not occur in a conditional clause, unless to make a request or give a polite order.)
would like
me to attend an interview I would be able to
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come
at any time convenient to you, as I do want to be a member of your beauty salon Alpha.
Faithfully
Simona
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Addison

IELTS letter Job application letter write a letter to get a new job at beauty salon

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
158 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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