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Introduction of student and University application

Introduction of student and University application 2KBJX
“On behalf of my generation, I sincerely apologize for having focused solely on developing the economics, brought the whole nation’s economy of the poverty, but have failed, and forgotten to provide an effective and evolutionary education for the younger generation”. For a five-year-old kid, I could barely understand that quote, and it seems more like a random small talk between a father and his own daughter on a rainy Sunday afternoon. And yet, it was carved deep in my mind by the image of the first and the only time tear shedded on my father’s face in the whole career of fatherhood. Always be reminded of the importance of education, I even had chances to witness pieces of life being ravaged by the disrespect towards education, people who unable to move on to higher education owing to bad circumstances, . . Those harshness truths have raised in me the eager to study hard, dive deeper in the knowledge ocean day in, day out, and become a successful person for myself. Although the fact that my current education field is the Faculty of Education Management, I found myself interested in business because of past experiences working as an amateur accountant in a small English Center. The job gave me basic experiences for my further career decision. I chose to study a business-related course at your university due to the fact that it has always been interesting and it offers great opportunites for future development and implementation. During my research I found out that your university offers students excellent academic quality and well-developed practically oriented education, especially the foundation course for international students who do not have chances to study the A-Level courses: Business and Management Foundation Programme. Throughout my education, I have taken part in many different activities. My volunteer activites started in summer 2014, I joined with my secondary school to visit the orphanage and have them sufficiented with food and new clothes. After this, my family started to visit different churches, orphanage housing, nursing home every summer and spring holiday. In summer 2019, I started to work for an English center, which provided me opportunities to interact with childrens, get to know their feeling and I could be able to be in their shoes to provide them help in doing the practices and relationships with teachers. The job lasted for three months only, yet, I found myself grew upp greater than before. That voluntary job offered me to practice communication skills and allowed me to deal with various situations that would come up in the working worlk. A year later, I got accepted to work as an accountant. Owing to have little knowledge and experiences in the field, most of the time working there, I learned how to do basic work, such as communicating with customers, receiving payments, settling classes, to name but a few. Three months of being an intern, the job helped develop my neworking, organisation skills, especially helped with shaping my analytical and critical thinking skills, as they allowed me to analyse and understand the final statistics. On top of this, after graduating from high school with three years of practicing group projects, hosting shows and making videos for school projects, I am working in a small volunteer group with my best friends, which mission is to support and upgrade students in primary and secondary schools’ English abilities, and I am in charge of teaching two groups of students, both are in secondary. The current job, together with past experiences in high schools and voluntary activites has polished my leadership, management, problem solving and communication skills, which I believe would be beneficial at univerisity. I want to study Business and Managemment because in the future I aim to be an independent woman, in charge of my own destiny. My keen interest in Business is demonstrated by my work as an accountant. My desire to learn new things and work out of my comfort zone is illustrated by how amazing the power of money is, how can a poverty person became a businessman by building his company; and testing myself with new experiences excites me. I am ready for this challenge in my life, and know that I will work hard, thrive and develop as a result of undertaking a course in Business and Management, as well as contribute and give back to my University community. The business world is a rapidly changing global technological environment, and more and more intelligent people are thriving in the field. Therefore, I hope that this course would provide me an insight into the real world of business by shaping my understanding of how this world worlds, how successful businessmen run their own companies smoothly and effectively. I am a conscientious, hardworking young person who is reliable and eager to learn new skills. I enjoy working in a fast paced environment and always bring a positive energy to the team. I can work well independently or as part of a larger team. I look forward to furthering my knowledge and passion by undertaking this course. I am also looking forward to experiencing all the opportunities university life has to offer.
“On behalf of my generation, I
sincerely
apologize for having focused
solely
on developing the economics, brought the whole nation’s economy of the poverty,
but
have failed, and forgotten to provide an effective and evolutionary
education
for the younger generation”. For a five-year-
old
kid, I could
barely
understand that quote, and it seems more like a random
small
talk between a father and his
own
daughter on a rainy Sunday afternoon. And
yet
, it
was carved
deep in my mind by the image of the
first
and the
only
time tear
shedded
on my father’s face in the whole career of fatherhood. Always
be reminded
of the importance of
education
, I even had chances to witness pieces of life
being ravaged
by the disrespect towards
education
,
people
who unable to
move
on to higher
education
owing to
bad
circumstances
, .
.
Those harshness truths have raised in me the eager to
study
hard
, dive deeper in the knowledge ocean day in, day out, and become a successful person for myself.

Although the fact that my
current
education
field is the Faculty of
Education
Management
, I found myself interested in
business
because
of past
experiences
working
as an amateur accountant in a
small
English Center. The
job
gave me basic
experiences
for my
further
career decision. I chose to
study
a business-related
course
at your
university
due to the fact that it has always been interesting and it offers great
opportunites
for future development and implementation.

During my research I found out that your
university
offers
students
excellent academic quality and well-developed
practically
oriented
education
,
especially
the foundation
course
for international
students
who do not have chances to
study
the A-Level
courses
:
Business
and
Management
Foundation
Programme
.

Throughout my
education
, I have taken part in
many
different
activities. My volunteer
activites
started
in summer 2014, I
joined
with my secondary
school
to visit the orphanage and have them
sufficiented
with food and
new
clothes. After this, my family
started
to visit
different
churches, orphanage housing, nursing home every summer and spring holiday. In summer 2019, I
started
to
work
for an English center, which provided me opportunities to interact with
childrens
,
get
to know their feeling and I could be able to be in their shoes to provide them
help
in doing the practices and relationships with teachers. The
job
lasted for three months
only
,
yet
, I found myself grew
upp
greater than
before
. That voluntary
job
offered me to practice communication
skills
and
allowed
me to deal with various situations that would
come
up in the
working
worlk
. A year later, I
got
accepted
to
work
as an accountant. Owing to have
little
knowledge and
experiences
in the field, most of the time
working
there, I learned how to do basic
work
, such as communicating with customers, receiving payments, settling classes, to name
but
a few. Three months of being an intern, the
job
helped
develop my
neworking
,
organisation
skills
,
especially
helped
with shaping my analytical and critical thinking
skills
, as they
allowed
me to
analyse
and understand the final statistics. On top of this, after graduating from high
school
with three years of practicing group projects, hosting
shows
and making videos for
school
projects, I am
working
in a
small
volunteer group with my best friends, which mission is to support and upgrade
students
in primary and secondary
schools’
English abilities, and I am in charge of teaching two groups of
students
, both are in secondary. The
current
job
, together with past
experiences
in high
schools
and voluntary
activites
has polished my leadership,
management
, problem solving and communication
skills
, which I believe would be beneficial at
univerisity
.

I want to
study
Business
and
Managemment
because
in the future I aim to be an independent woman, in charge of my
own
destiny. My keen interest in
Business
is demonstrated
by my
work
as an accountant. My desire to learn
new
things and
work
out of my comfort zone
is illustrated
by how amazing the power of money is, how can a poverty person became a businessman by building his
company
; and testing myself with
new
experiences
excites me. I am ready for this challenge in my life, and know that I will
work
hard
, thrive and develop
as a result
of undertaking a
course
in
Business
and
Management
,
as well
as contribute and give back to my
University
community.

The
business
world
is a
rapidly
changing global technological environment, and more and more intelligent
people
are thriving in the field.
Therefore
, I hope that this
course
would provide me an insight into the real
world
of
business
by shaping my understanding of how this
world
worlds
, how successful businessmen run their
own
companies
smoothly
and
effectively
.

I am a conscientious, hardworking young person who is reliable and eager to learn
new
skills
. I enjoy
working
in a
fast
paced environment and always bring a
positive
energy to the team.
I
can
work
well
independently
or as part of a larger team.
I
look forward to furthering my knowledge and passion by undertaking this
course
.
I
am
also
looking forward to experiencing all the
opportunities
university
life
has to
offer.
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IELTS letter Introduction of student and University application

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7 paragraphs
859 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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