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introduction, information and detailed program

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Dear Sir or Madam, First of all, I would like to introduce myself. My name is Rafael and I am a manufacturing engineer and I kindly would like to ask for some information regarding the Industry 4. 0 Seminar that will take place in your country. Since the seminar will take place in Italy, I would like to know if it will be opened to foreign workers as well, my team and myself would like to participated to this event; however we are in Canada. Considering we can attend it, could you please provide me the dates and a detailed program and agenda as well? We are interested into the robot cooperation with human beings. Yours faithfully, Rafael Morassuti
Dear Sir or Madam,
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to introduce myself. My name is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Rafael and
I am a manufacturing engineer and I kindly would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information regarding the Industry 4. 0
Possible agreement error. The noun 'Seminar' seems to be countable, so consider using: "seminars".
Seminar
that will take place in your country. Since the seminar will take place in Italy, I would like to know if it will
be opened
to foreign workers
as well
, my team and myself would like to
The usual preposition for "participated" is "in" not "to". Revise: "participated in".
participated to
this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
;
however
we are in Canada. Considering we can attend it, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
provide me the dates and a detailed program and agenda
as well
? We
are interested
into the robot cooperation with human beings.

Yours
faithfully
, Rafael
Possible spelling mistake found.
Morassuti
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IELTS letter introduction, information and detailed program

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
118 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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