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In your letter, you should tell: what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give.

In your letter, you should tell: what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give. L9X8p
Dear Sir or Madam, This well-thought letter concerns the inadequate indoor as well as outdoor clubs for physical activities, especially for middle-aged persons like me. To start with, the government should prioritize building some sports amenities in the city. Our city has plenty of parks for children, but at the same time, there are hardly any facilities for elder people. Although some individuals would argue that a workout at a gymnasium is more advantageous to our physical health, we should not forget the importance of yoga to our mental health. The argument for building these amenities is that obesity is gradually becoming a prominent health issue in people nowadays compared to a decade ago, and this reason in itself should be enough for the authorities to build a sport facility, a gymnasium in specific. In addition to this, the world is moving towards the problem of depression because of the ever-increasing workload, which can be solved to an extent by yoga. Moreover, a country can only flourish as long as its population is healthy. I would advise the ruling party to pay some attention to this issue because, unless the working class is physically and mentally fit, the growth of the nation is impacted. I would be grateful if you considered this suggestion of mine. With regards, Arpan parikh
Dear Sir or Madam,

This well-
thought
letter concerns the inadequate indoor
as well
as outdoor clubs for physical activities,
especially
for middle-aged persons like me.

To
start
with, the
government
should prioritize building
some
sports amenities in the city. Our city has
plenty
of parks for children,
but
at the same time, there are hardly any facilities for elder
people
. Although
some
individuals would argue that a workout at a gymnasium is more advantageous to our physical health, we should not forget the importance of yoga to our mental health.

The argument for building these amenities is that obesity is
gradually
becoming a prominent health issue in
people
nowadays compared to a decade ago, and this reason in itself should be
enough
for the authorities to build a sport facility, a gymnasium in specific.
In addition
to this, the world is moving towards the problem of depression
because
of the ever-increasing workload, which can
be solved
to an extent by yoga.

Moreover
, a country can
only
flourish as long as its population is healthy. I would advise the ruling party to pay
some
attention to this issue
because
, unless the working
class
is
physically
and mentally fit, the growth of the nation
is impacted
.

I would be grateful if you considered this suggestion of mine.

With regards,

Arpan
parikh
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IELTS letter In your letter, you should tell: what facilities you want why you want them what suggestions you can give.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
218 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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