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You were hurt in a minor accident at a local swimming pool and you wish to complain to the swimming pool management.

You were hurt in a minor accident at a local swimming pool and you wish to complain to the swimming pool management. PE362

Dear Madam, My name is Alexandra Petrova and I am a regular visitor of your swimming pool. I have been visiting your pool for 2 years and I was so glad to go to this place every day. I am writing to complain about accident, which had happened this Monday. That day, in the evening, I was in swimming pool with my smaller sister. I was swimming, while my sister was sitting near the pool and she decided to join me. When she was almost at the water, unfortunately, she treaded on something very sharp. Then I found out that it was a piece of glass. My sister hurt her leg very badly and later we went to the hospital to sew up this wound. I suggest to you to apologize to my sister, because now she can’t go to school due to her hurt. Also I will be so grateful if you could check floors in your swimming pool. I would be so grateful if you could monitor security more closely. I look forward to hearing from you soon, Alexandra Petrova

Dear Madam,

My name is Alexandra Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).Petrova, and
Petrova and
 I am a regular visitor of your swimming You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtankswimming poollakebathlagoonpond
pool
. I have been visiting your You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtankswimming poollakebathlagoonpond
pool
 for 2 Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).years, and
years and
 I was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 glad to go to this place every day.

I am writing to complain about accident, which had happened this Monday. That day, in the evening, I was in swimming You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtankswimming poollakebathlagoonpond
pool
 with my smaller You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
. I was swimming, while my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
 was sitting near the Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).pool, and
pool and
 she decided to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 me. When she was almost at the water, unfortunately, she Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "trod", the past tense form of the verb 'tread'?trodtreatedtradedthreadeddreadedbreaded
treaded
 on something This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 sharp. Then I found out that it was a piece of glass. My You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
 hurt her leg This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
badly
 and later we went to the hospital to sew up this wound.

I suggest to you to apologize to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelativetwin
sister
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 she can’t go to school due to her hurt. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 I will be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 grateful if you could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 floors in your swimming You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtankswimming poollakebathlagoonpond
pool
. I would be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 grateful if you could monitor security more closely
.

I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
,

Alexandra Possible spelling mistake found.PetraPetrol
Petrova