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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? bXeW
Dear Manager, I am writing to explain you some difficulties, which I am feeling since last month, and I would like to inform you. I am working a part time job with you in the evening and doing my master in software programming in the morning and that is not to cover my financial problem, it also can accomplish my skills in my field. But there are many troubles with the computer system here. First of all, they are not fully equipped with hardware and secondly not enough updated software in it. Basically we are working for many famous companies to provide them software and also we assist them in case of any troubleshooting. Consequently, if the company provides the latest machines with updated software to their workers, it will not be merely expedient for the company reputation and progress. It can also give an edge to the Programmer, Designer and Hardware/Network Engineer to learn and work well for the company clients in a better way. In this way, we can save our plethora of time and in output we can give fascinating work. I am looking forward to your passing my suggestion to higher management and hopefully they will take some corrective and optimistic action as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, A.I.N
Dear Manager,



I am writing to
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explain
you
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some
difficulties, which I am feeling since last month, and I would like to inform you.



I am working a part time job with you in the evening and doing my master in
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software
programming in the morning and
that is
not to cover my financial problem, it
also
can accomplish my
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skills
in my field.
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But
there are
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many
troubles with the computer system here.





First
of all, they are not
fully
equipped with hardware and
secondly
not
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enough
updated
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software
in it.
Basically
we are working for
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many
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famous
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companies
to provide them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
and
also
we assist them in case of any troubleshooting.

Consequently
, if the
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company
provides the latest machines with updated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
to their workers, it will not be
merely
expedient for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
reputation and progress. It can
also
give an edge to the Programmer, Designer and Hardware/Network Engineer to learn and work well for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
clients in a better way. In this way, we can save our plethora of time and in output we can give fascinating work.



I am looking forward to your passing my suggestion to higher management and
hopefully
they will take
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some
corrective and optimistic action as
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soon
as possible.



Yours
sincerely
,



A.I.N
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