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I'm Muyassar Hamidjonova if you remember we met in the plane during a flight from Tashkent to Turkey on Friday at 9pm on 8th of April.

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Dear Mr John I'm Muyassar Hamidjonova if you remember we met in the plane during a flight from Tashkent to Turkey on Friday at 9pm on 8th of April. As we sat togather during the flight, we talked about your bussiness on how you are running the chain of restaurant. That moment you suggested a suitable job for me from your new restaurant. For that reason i am writing to you to express interest in managing the new line of your chain of restaurant. You mentioned you are going to enlarge services for welcoming and settling guests and tourists from Uzbekistan. I can say for this place my candidate can be be the suitable one. Becouse first of all i am uzbek i know the traditions and culture, beside this i graduated the Univetsity of servicing and managing tourism in one the well known universities in Uzbekistan. I have 4year of experience in working as a manager in restaurant of Tashkent Plaza hotel. If you want we can discuss further information when we meet face to face I look forward to hearing a good news from you. Yourth sincerely Muyassar Hamidjonova
Dear Mr John

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Muyassar
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Hamidjonova
if you remember we met in the
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during a flight from Tashkent to Turkey on Friday at 9pm on 8th of April. As we sat
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togather
during the flight, we talked about your
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bussiness
on how you are running the chain of restaurant. That moment you suggested a suitable job for me from your new restaurant.

For that reason
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am writing to you to express interest in managing the new line of your chain of restaurant. You mentioned you are going to enlarge services for welcoming and settling guests and tourists from Uzbekistan. I can say for this place my candidate can be
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the suitable one.
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Becouse
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first of all
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am
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uzbek
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know the traditions and culture, beside this
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graduated the
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Univetsity
of servicing and managing tourism in one the well known universities in Uzbekistan. I have 4year of experience in working as a manager in restaurant of Tashkent Plaza hotel. If you want we can discuss
further
information when we
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I look forward to hearing a
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news from you.

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sincerely
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Muyassar
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Hamidjonova

IELTS letter I'm Muyassar Hamidjonova if you remember we met in the plane during a flight from Tashkent to Turkey on Friday at 9pm on 8th of April.

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