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I want to tell you about the event that I will organize an the occasion of september 1 independence.

I want to tell you about the event that I will organize an the occasion of september 1 independence. Yg0Ld
Dear Mr Avril I want to tell you about the event that I will organize on the occasion of September 1 independence. The event is dedicated to the 30 th anniversary of your independense. Every year this event is celebrated in our school. Stufents will also have poems and musical performances. As a result, our young students are very intirested in the holiday. Our school season starts on indepedence day. Based on your many years of experience, I would like you to share your knowledge with young people and read poems you have written. I would be grateful if you are ready to participate in event. I look farward to your reply. Your sincerely. Richard Marx
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Avril


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that I will organize on the occasion of September 1 independence. The
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is dedicated
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anniversary of your
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independense
. Every year this
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is celebrated
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have poems and musical performances.
As a result
, our young students are
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intirested
in the holiday. Our school season
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on
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indepedence
day. Based on your
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many
years of experience, I would like you to share your knowledge with young
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people
and read poems you have written. I would be grateful if you are ready to participate in
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event
. I look
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farward
to your reply.

Your
sincerely
.

Richard Marx

IELTS letter I want to tell you about the event that I will organize an the occasion of september 1 independence.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
115 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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