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I have learned from John, the owner of Abc Bakery, you are looking for a experienced baker. I am truly interested in the vacancy. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the post of a baker in your company.

I have learned from John, the owner of Abc Bakery, you are looking for a experienced baker. I am truly interested in the vacancy. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the post of a baker in your company. 56arA
I have learned from John, the owner of Abc Bakery, you are looking for an experienced baker. I am truly interested in the vacancy. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the post of a baker in your company. I graduated from the baking faculty of Sg Tourist Vocational College in 2008. Then, I worked as a baker for DP Bakery for four years before I opened my own one in 2013. Up to now, I have had approximately seven years of experience in making cakes such as muffin, sandwich, bread and so forth. With my nature of diligence together with my extensive experience, i feel confident that I will meet your recruitment requirements and contribute significantly to your development plans as long as I am employed. Enclosed in this letter are my resume, a medical check-up and certificates relating to my banking as well as my English skills. I am willing to discuss further information in more detail when you grant me a job interview at your convenience. I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for taking my letter into concern. I am also looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully.
I have learned from John, the owner of
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Abc
Bakery, you are looking for an experienced baker. I am
truly
interested in the vacancy.
Therefore
, I am writing to apply for the post of a baker in your
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company
.

I graduated from the baking faculty of
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Sg
Tourist Vocational College in 2008. Then, I worked as a baker for DP Bakery for four years
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before
I opened my
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own
one in 2013. Up to
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now
, I have had approximately seven years of experience in making cakes such as muffin, sandwich, bread and
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so
forth. With my nature of diligence together with my extensive experience,
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i
feel confident that I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
your recruitment requirements and contribute
significantly
to your development plans as long as I
am employed
.

Enclosed in this letter are my resume, a medical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
-up and certificates relating to my banking
as well
as my English
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. I am willing to discuss
further
information in more detail when you grant me a job interview at your convenience.

I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for taking my letter into concern.
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I
am
also
looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
.
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IELTS letter I have learned from John, the owner of Abc Bakery, you are looking for a experienced baker. I am truly interested in the vacancy. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the post of a baker in your company.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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