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I am writing to complain about mobile phone which I recently bought from your shop.After only three days, things started to go wrong.

I am writing to complain about mobile phone which I recently bought from your shop. After only three days, things started to go wrong. rLxK2

On December 21 viseted one of your local shops in order to buy a mobile phone myself. Looking around the shop I encountered expected item. and I asked a shop assistants about it. After getting all information I decided to purchase it four days later I know that about the problem of the item. When I used the mobile phone for the first time it worked properly and the battery is dead. Howewer, when I utilized it the second time there seemed to have been a malfunection while it was working. Furthermore, when I tried mobile phone another the same thing happened. In addition to this the machine did not work the another chargers. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon as soon as possible and to receiving a new mobile phone. Please give this matter your immediate attention. Yours faithfully, Kamolov Jamol

On December 21 Possible spelling mistake found.visitedvise ted
viseted
 one of your local shops in order to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 a mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
 myself. Looking around the shop I encountered This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 item. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterAnd
and
 I asked a shop assistants about it. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 getting all information I decided to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 it four days later I know that about the problem of the item. When I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 the mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
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 time it worked properly
 and the battery is dead. Possible spelling mistake found.HoweverHow ewer
Howewer
, when I utilized it the second time there seemed to have been a Possible spelling mistake found.malfunction
malfunection
 while it was working. Furthermore
, when I tried mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
 another the same thing happened. In addition
 to this the machine did not work the another chargers. I am looking forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as possible and to receiving a new mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 give this matter your immediate attention. Yours faithfully
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Kamolov
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