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I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to the bus services that are carried in my area over the two weeks.

I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to the bus services that are carried in my area over the two weeks. 5YBV
I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to the bus services that are carried in my area over the two weeks. The problem is that the buses more often than not come on different times than the actual bus arrival scheduled time. I am really at my wits end. So, everytime I check the schedule before I appear at the bus stop, however, it is in vain because by the time I get there all the buses that would have taken me to my destination have been gone. As a result I am late to work every single day or vica versa. I get to work one or two hours earlier than expected. I would like you to fix the bus arrival schedule so it reflects the exact time when the bus is coming. Other than that, that would be great if you add a few more buses on line in case we miss one then would not wait forever to catch the another one. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to the bus services that
are carried
in my area over the two weeks. The problem is that the buses more
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often
than not
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come
on
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different
times than the actual bus arrival scheduled time.

I am
really
at my wits
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end
.
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So
,
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everytime
I
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check
the schedule
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before
I appear at the bus
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stop
,
however
, it is in vain
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because
by the time I
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get
there all the buses that would have taken me to my destination have
been gone
.
As a result
I am late to work every single day or
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vica
versa. I
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get
to work one or two hours earlier than
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expected
.

I would like you to
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fix
the bus arrival schedule
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so
it reflects the exact time when the bus is coming. Other than that, that would be great if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
a few more buses on line in case we miss one then would not wait forever to catch the another one.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

IELTS letter I am writing this letter to draw your immediate attention to the bus services that are carried in my area over the two weeks.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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