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I am writing this letter to apply for the part-time job as a volunteer at the local museum.

I am writing this letter to apply for the part-time job as a volunteer at the local museum. Firstly, I need a work field experience related to my field to submit school for before graduation because it is required (to graduate (from school)). I have to prove that I have the work field experience as the volunteer. (Also, this place is close to my house, so I made a decision to work there. it would be convenient for me to commute. -> so로 연결하는 대신 since로 연결해보기) I have some useful abilities to work there. I have a very good interpersonal skill, which means I can interact or communicate with others easily/comfortably, as well as welcoming visitors. Furthermore, I can speak two languages, which are Korean and English, so it will be helpful to treat customers appropriately when the tourists from South Korea visit the museum for sightseeing. As I mentioned, I am not available during the daytime due to my school schedules. However, I can work anytime on the weekends or weekdays after 5pm. To be honest, My timetable is fairly flexible, so if you need my help anytime, I can work whenever you need me because I can change my
I am writing this letter to apply for the part-time job as a volunteer at the local museum.

Firstly
, I need a
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field experience related to my field to submit school for
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field experience as the volunteer. (
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, this place is close to my
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house
,
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there.
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it
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I have
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some
useful abilities to
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work
there. I have a
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very
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good
interpersonal
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skill
, which means I can interact or communicate with others
easily
/
comfortably
,
as well
as welcoming visitors.
Furthermore
, I can speak two languages, which are Korean and English,
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so
it will be helpful to treat customers
appropriately
when the tourists from South Korea visit the museum for sightseeing.

As I mentioned, I am not available during the daytime due to my school schedules.
However
, I can
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work
anytime on the weekends or weekdays after 5pm. To be honest, My timetable is
fairly
flexible,
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so
if you need my
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help
anytime, I can
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whenever you need me
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because
I can
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IELTS letter I am writing this letter to apply for the part-time job as a volunteer at the local museum.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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