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I am writing on behalf of a children's home to inquire your help to publicize for the voluntary vacancies on this special month, called "Beloved Winter" which we are organizing.

I am writing on behalf of a children's home to inquire your help to publicize for the voluntary vacancies on this special month, called "Beloved Winter" which we are organizing. rGplL
I am writing on behalf of a children's home to inquire your help to publicize for the voluntary vacancies on this special month, called "Beloved Winter" which we are organizing. There are various activities planned for the program, which will happened happen at the end of November. Therefore volunteers are (much more) requested at the weekends. We happily announce the recruitment for winter 2014. Applicants are asked to submit a letter writing for choosing programs and clarifying your desires and motivations for participating and what you hope to gain in the project and obtain the family commitments on Wednesday, 12nd, November. The most important requirement is that candidates need to be sympathetic and really willing to help disabled and homeless children. I would be most grateful if you could pass on and advertise the recruitment in the local newspaper published next week. We will sure that you will agree that because both volunteers and children might have huge benefits gained from such a project. First, children can obviously be supported and assisted by society because the goal of programs is children's happiness and warmness in the winter. Secondly, our children's home is potential and non-profit organization in Vietnam bringing a series of dynamic and experienced activities, which is a good destination for who are eager for enjoying every single moment in volunteering within a multicultural atmosphere. Cooperating and communicating with other volunteers from different regions in Vietnam, volunteers can learn in an excellent environment which can create more changes to challenge themselves. Also, being a volunteer means that candidates can give one hand to better our society through meaningful volunteering work. We assure to bring you a huge number of opportunities to show off and enhance your skills which is hardly found in somewhere else. For more information about the recruitment process, please carefully read the Candidate Booklet or contact us by email childrenshome@gmail. com. The official results will be announced at noon on Sunday in the newspaper. I would appreciate if you could inform me as soon as possible. Thank you in advance for your cooperation. co-operation.
I am writing on behalf of a children's home to inquire your
help
to publicize for the voluntary vacancies on this special month, called
"
Beloved Winter
"
which we are organizing.

There are various activities planned for the program, which will happened happen at the
end
of November.
Therefore
volunteers
are (much more) requested at the weekends. We
happily
announce the recruitment for winter 2014. Applicants
are asked
to submit a letter writing for choosing programs and clarifying your desires and motivations for participating and what you hope to gain in the project and obtain the family commitments on Wednesday, 12nd, November. The most
important
requirement is that candidates need to be sympathetic and
really
willing to
help
disabled and homeless children.

I would be most grateful if you could pass on and advertise the recruitment in the local newspaper published
next
week. We will sure that you will
agree
that
because
both
volunteers
and children might have huge benefits gained from such a project.
First
, children can
obviously
be supported
and assisted by society
because
the goal of programs is children's happiness and warmness in the winter.

Secondly
, our children's home is potential and non-profit organization in Vietnam bringing a series of dynamic and experienced activities, which is a
good
destination for who are eager for enjoying every single moment in volunteering within a multicultural atmosphere. Cooperating and communicating with other
volunteers
from
different
regions in Vietnam,
volunteers
can learn in an excellent environment which can create more
changes
to challenge themselves.
Also
, being a
volunteer
means that candidates can give one hand to better our society through meaningful volunteering work. We assure to bring you a huge number of opportunities to
show
off and enhance your
skills
which is hardly found in somewhere else.

For more information about the recruitment process,
please
carefully
read the Candidate Booklet or contact us by email
childrenshome@gmail
.
com
. The official results will
be announced
at noon on Sunday in the newspaper. I would appreciate if you could inform me as
soon
as possible. Thank you in advance for your cooperation.
co-operation
.
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IELTS letter I am writing on behalf of a children's home to inquire your help to publicize for the voluntary vacancies on this special month, called "Beloved Winter" which we are organizing.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
348 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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