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However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

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Dear officer, My name is Denis Johnson, and I am staying in one of your college dorm rooms which is the number 221 on B block. This letters subject is my discomfort of my roommate who is not taking my words seriously. Therefore, I am writing this letter to you for further instructions. The problem is my roommate constantly interrupts my study and that results of me losing my focus of the work that I am currently working on. A number of times I tried to talk to him on the contrary he did not care for this situation. How he interrupts my study? He interrupts my study by listening to loud music and inviting his friends every day which results a distraction to me. I would like to change my room to a more understanding roommate that willing to make plans with me for weekly and solve any problems we may encounter with these plans. I hope you will return to me as soon as possible. Have a good day, Denis Johnson.
Dear officer, My name is Denis Johnson, and I am staying in one of your college dorm rooms which is the number 221 on B block. This letters subject is my discomfort of my roommate who is not taking my words
seriously
.
Therefore
, I am writing this letter to you for
further
instructions.

The problem is my roommate
constantly
interrupts my study and that results of me losing my focus of the work that I am
currently
working on. A number of times I tried to talk to him
on the contrary
he did not care for this situation. How he interrupts my study? He interrupts my study by listening to loud music and inviting his friends every day which results a distraction to me.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
my room to a more understanding roommate that willing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
plans with me for weekly and solve any problems we may encounter with these plans. I hope you will return to me as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
day, Denis Johnson.

IELTS letter However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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