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friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. v.1

Dear Jean, I am so glad to hear from you after such a decade of time since we both graduated in University. I'm happy to see your post in facebook that you've visited a lot of beautiful countries with your family. You've mentioned that you are interested to work here in Saudi Arabia and so we can meet each other. I'm so excited to see you soon. Well, actually upon receiving your email, I started to search for a vacant job. Surprisingly, there is a hospital newly opened here in Jeddah where im living hiring for ICU nurse. With number of years of experience I'm sure you are qualified in this job. . . . Here's the website www. kfsh. sa. gov. Don't forget to send your resume as soon as possible. Goodluck! And I'm looking forward to meeting you soon. Warm Wishes, Ayesha
Dear Jean,

I am
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glad to hear from you after such a decade of time since we both
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graduated
in University. I'm happy to
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your post
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in facebook
that you've visited
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a lot of
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beautiful
countries with your family. You've mentioned that you
are interested
to work here in Saudi
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Arabia and
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we can
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each other. I'm
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excited to
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.

Well, actually upon receiving your email, I
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started
to search for a vacant job.
Surprisingly
, there is a hospital
newly
opened here in Jeddah where
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living hiring for ICU nurse. With number of years of experience I'm sure you
are qualified
in this job.
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Here's the website
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kfsh
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. gov. Don't forget to
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send
your resume as
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as possible.

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Goodluck
! And I'm looking forward to meeting you
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Warm Wishes,

Ayesha
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IELTS letter friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. v. 1

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  American English
7 paragraphs
143 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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