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My name is Saruultsetseg, I am 16 years old and in the 11th grade. To make a first impression on you, I want to say something about myself and my character. I will describe myself as reliable, friendly, positive, open-minded, and interested in meeting new countries and people. In my free time I like to try many new things. I participate in many programs and clubs, most recently in the Youth Parliament program, under which I have implemented a project on climate change in my aimag. During the implementation of the project, many obstacles were encountered and the project was successfully completed without giving up. We have a total of 8 families and live with my parents, brother and four siblings. I like to spend time with my family and usually cook together. We try a variety of dishes, such as dumplings, pancakes, and Korean food. Or we like to watch movies, play video games and travel together. A few years ago, my family's trip to Mongolia was the biggest trip, and I had a lot of memories and fun. I love to travel because it challenges me to challenge myself and overcome other challenges. I have four siblings, so I have a lot of responsibilities at home. I get up in the morning and take my siblings to school and pick them up during the day. I also helps my siblings cook and do their homework. I have two best friends who are as close to me as sisters. What sets us apart from other friends is that they always support each other and help each other grow. The three of us help teach others what we can do best. I help my two friends write their essays, and my two friends help me think of problems and play volleyball. We always try to be friends who support each other. In we are free time, watch movies, cook, do homework, or talk with my friends. My city is a big city with a large population. For me, it is the safest and most beautiful city with the least crime. There are also many historical monuments in our city, such as museums and monuments. My future goal is to study in America. The University of California, Berkeley is my dream school. Because this school has a very good environmental program, I want to continue my education, and I was very encouraged by the fact that a local sister attended this school. The reason for studying the environment is that Mongolia is a beautiful country, but it is already worn out and one of the most affected by climate change. Therefore, we intend to study in this field in the future and contribute to solving the problems facing our country. For these purposes, I must enroll in the Flex program. Because before I went to study in the United States for four years, if I had attended the Flex program and studied and lived in the United States in high school, I would have been able to get to know America better and get to know American culture. American people, American style. I think it will be easier for me to study at an American university. I am also confident that if I can join the Flex program, I will be able to return to Mongolia and pass the IELTS test without any problems. It is also difficult to live with a host family for a year in the future with people from two different countries, different cultures and different perspectives. However, I know that everything depends on me to successfully overcome all these obstacles. If I am patient, flexible, and respectful of my host family, it will be much easier to overcome those obstacles. So I am confident that in the future I will be able to live successfully with my guest family for a year. The guest is looking forward to seeing his family. The experience I want to gain from the exchange year is that I will be visiting the United States as a representative of my country, therefore I want to have the experience and ability to be highly responsible, adaptable, independent, share knowledge and lead my peers.
My name is
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Saruultsetseg
, I am 16 years
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and in the 11th grade. To
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want
to say something about myself and my character. I will
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describe
myself as reliable, friendly,
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positive
, open-minded, and interested in meeting new
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countries
and
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people
. In my free time I like to try
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new things. I participate in
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programs
and clubs, most recently in the Youth Parliament
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program
, under which I have implemented a project on climate
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change
in my
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aimag
. During the implementation of the project,
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obstacles
were encountered
and the project was
successfully
completed without giving up.

We have a total of 8
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families
and
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live
with my parents, brother and four
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siblings
. I like to spend time with my
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family
and
usually
cook together. We try a variety of dishes, such as dumplings, pancakes, and Korean food. Or we like to
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watch
movies, play video games and travel together. A few years ago, my family's trip to Mongolia was the biggest trip, and I had
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a lot of
memories and fun. I
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love
to travel
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because
it challenges me to challenge myself and overcome
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other
challenges. I have four
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siblings
,
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I have
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a lot of
responsibilities at home.
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I
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up in the morning and take my
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and pick them up during the day.
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I
also
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my
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cook and do their homework.

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I
have two best
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friends
who are as close to me as sisters. What sets us apart from
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other
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friends
is that they always support each
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other
and
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help
each
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other
grow. The three of us
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help
teach others what we can do best. I
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help
my two
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friends
write their essays, and my two
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friends
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help
me
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think
of problems and play volleyball. We always try to be
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friends
who support each
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other
. In we are free time,
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watch
movies, cook, do homework, or talk with my friends.

My city is a
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big
city with a large population. For me, it is the safest and most
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beautiful
city with the least crime. There are
also
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many
historical monuments in our city, such as museums and monuments.

My
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future
goal is to
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study
in America. The University of California, Berkeley is my dream
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school
.
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Because
this
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school
has a
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very
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good
environmental
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program
, I
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want
to continue my education, and I was
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very
encouraged by the fact that a local sister attended this
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school
. The reason for studying the environment is that Mongolia is a
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beautiful
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country
,
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but
it is already worn out and one of the most
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affected
by climate
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change
.
Therefore
, we intend to
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study
in this field in the
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future
and contribute to solving the problems facing our
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country
. For these purposes, I
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must
enroll in the Flex
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program
.
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I went to
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in the United States for four years, if I had attended the Flex
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program
and studied and
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lived
in the United States in high
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school
, I would have been able to
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get
to know America better and
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get
to know American culture. American
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people
, American style. I
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think
it will be easier for me to
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study
at an American university. I am
also
confident that if I can
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join
the Flex
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program
, I will be able to return to Mongolia and pass the IELTS
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test
without any problems.

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also
difficult to
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live
with a host
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for a
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in the
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with
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,
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cultures and
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perspectives.
However
, I know that everything depends on me to
successfully
overcome all these obstacles. If I am patient, flexible, and respectful of my host
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family
, it will be much easier to overcome those obstacles.
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So
I am confident that in the
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future
I will be able to
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live
successfully
with my guest
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family
for a
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year
. The guest is looking forward to seeing his family.

The experience I
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to gain from the exchange
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year
is that I will be visiting the United States as a representative of my
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country
,
therefore
I
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want
to have the experience and ability to be
highly
responsible, adaptable, independent, share knowledge and lead my peers.
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IELTS letter exchange year host family letter

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7 paragraphs
701 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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