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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. v.3

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. v. 3 gdPl
Hi Albert, This is William from Canada. I hope you remembered me as we had lot of conversation in recent plan journey where we met exactly. So, in this letter I would like to draw your attention towards offering me into a good job in one of your restaurants. It's had been good time to spent with you during plan journey really learning a lot from you, next move on to my professional details I am having 5 years of well experienced into hotel management in of the good resorts as well as I completed my MBA education most recently with Hotel management as my stream as I mentioned before with five years of experienced into Hotel management. So, it would be very helpful for me if you have been offering any kind of certain job related to hotel management in one of your restaurants. Here I am requesting you to please go through the following all details very clearly which I am going to send soon in my resume. It would be a great helpful for me if you been placed me into one of the good restaurants. I am waiting to hear a response soon in positive manner, Yours faithfully, William.
Hi Albert, This is William from Canada. I hope you remembered me as we had
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lot of
conversation in recent plan journey where we met exactly.
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, in this letter I would like to draw your attention towards offering me into a
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good
job in one of your restaurants.

It's had been
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good
time to spent with you during plan journey
really
learning a lot from you,
next
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move
on to my professional
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details
I am having 5 years of well experienced into
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hotel
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management
in of the
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good
resorts
as well
as I completed my MBA education most recently with
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Hotel
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management
as my stream as I mentioned
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before
with five years of experienced into
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Hotel
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management
.
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So
, it would be
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very
helpful for me if you have been offering any kind of certain job related to
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hotel
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management
in one of your restaurants.

Here I am requesting you to
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please
go through the following all
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details
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very
clearly
which I am going to
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send
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soon
in my resume. It would be a great helpful for me if you
been placed
me into one of the
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good
restaurants.

I am waiting to hear a response
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soon
in
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positive
manner,

Yours
faithfully
, William.
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IELTS letter During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. v. 3

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  American English
5 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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