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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Download IELTS Tutorials - Writing App You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say, - Why do you want to apply? - What are your future goals? - Why would it be beneficial for the company? Write at least 150 words.

Download IELTS Tutorials - Writing App You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say, - Why do you want to apply? - What are your future goals? - Why would it be beneficial for the company? 2DOA
Dear manager, I am John Doe, one of the part-time workers in your company. I am writing to apply for the position that have been posted last week. After being a part-time worker in your company for a few months, I found that there are many opportunities for employees to improve themselves. Not only the skill set, but also the style of the working environment. Through the new opportunity, I am going to be a trustworthy person toward my colleagues. Unlike the part0time job workers, many responsibilities are delegated to full-time job workers. On the other hand, working with a people who you already known is better than a brand new people, as it can help to save time on seeking a suitable person. I am hoping you will give me a chance to take this challenge. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, John Doe
Dear manager,

I am John Doe, one of the part-time workers in your
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company
. I am writing to apply for the position that have
been posted
last week.

After being a part-time worker in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for a few months, I found that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
opportunities for employees to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
themselves. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
set,
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but
also
the style of the working environment. Through the new opportunity, I am going to be a trustworthy person toward my colleagues. Unlike the part0time job workers,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
responsibilities
are delegated
to full-time job workers.

On the other hand
, working with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who you already known is better than a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
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people
, as it can
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help
to save time on seeking a suitable person.

I am hoping you will give me a chance to take this challenge. Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

John Doe

IELTS letter Download IELTS Tutorials - Writing App You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say, - Why do you want to apply? - What are your future goals? - Why would it be beneficial for the company?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
147 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Download IELTS Tutorials - Writing App You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say, - Why do you want to apply? - What are your future goals? - Why would it be beneficial for the company? Write at least 150 words.