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Detailed information regarding the dates Program schedule Enquire about cost and possible discounts for groups

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Dear Mr. Rakesh, I am writing this letter with the intent to enquire about the symposium on Work Life Balance which is scheduled in the next week. As you know how stressful it has become to cope up with balancing both the office and the and the home, I along with ten of my team members are really keen not to miss this meeting. I would like to know about the dates for the seminar, as it would be extremely convenient if it’s on the weekend. Also, I would like to know about the complete arrangement of the conference so that each one of us can plan accordingly beforehand. All of us were really willing to know the amount of fee we require to pay to become part of this special event. It would be extremely generous of you if we a group of ten participants are considered for some sort of waiver. I really look forward to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Nitish khajuria
Dear Mr. Rakesh,

I am writing this letter with the intent to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about the symposium on
It seems that a hyphen is missing.
Work Life
Balance which
is scheduled
in the
next
week.

As you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
how stressful it has become to cope up with balancing both the office and the and the home, I along with ten of my team members are
really
keen not to miss this meeting. I would like to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about the dates for the seminar, as it would be
extremely
convenient if it’s on the weekend.

Also
, I would like to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
about the complete arrangement of the conference
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that each one of us can plan
accordingly
beforehand.

All of us were
really
willing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
the amount of fee we require
Did you mean "paying"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to pay
to become part of this special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
. It would be
extremely
generous of you if we a group of ten participants
are considered
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
sort of waiver.

I
really
look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Nitish
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khajuria

IELTS letter Detailed information regarding the dates Program schedule Enquire about cost and possible discounts for groups

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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