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Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: - Explain how much you have missed your friend - Describe how you feel about your friend’s return - Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: - Explain how much you have missed your friend - Describe how you feel about your friend’s return - Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home d50LX
Dear Jenny, I am writing to you regarding your long waiting return to our lovely town. I can not express the size of my happiness as soon as I heard the news. It was hard for me to live without you for so long. I know you inside out as we grew up together and you are my sounding board. I count on you my secrets and you are my friend for hours in need. As soon as I heard about your return I was so happy that I could not hide my emotions and tears they were throwing endless. By the way, I have gorgeous news for you. As you may know, I rent an apartment and I live alone. Therefore, I want you to share a home with me as the accommodation is big enough for both of us. I am looking forward to meet you. Best Regards, Anna
Dear Jenny,

I am writing to you regarding your long waiting return to our lovely town. I can not express the size of my happiness as
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as I heard the news.

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for me to
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without you for
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long. I know you inside out as we grew up together and you are my sounding board. I count on you my secrets and you are my friend for hours in need.

As
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soon
as I heard about your return I was
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so
happy that I could not
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hide
my emotions and tears they were throwing endless.

By the way, I have gorgeous news for you. As you may know, I rent an apartment and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
alone.
Therefore
, I want you to share a home with me as the accommodation is
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big
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enough
for both of us.

I am looking forward to
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meet
you.

Best Regards,

Anna

IELTS letter Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: - Explain how much you have missed your friend - Describe how you feel about your friend’s return - Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

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  American English
8 paragraphs
150 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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