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Describe your leisure time and give opinion about advantages and disadvantages of having too much free time

Describe your leisure time and give opinion about advantages and disadvantages of having too much free time 9L61n
Hello everyone! I’m a beginner in IELTS and I hope all members in the Speaking IELTS group help me to improve four skills in English. Today, I would like to tell you about my break time. Leisure time is very necessary for many people in the world after stressful work and study. There are many ways to entertain like that: listening to music, reading books, cook some dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, hanging out with friends… In my spare hour, I usually listen to music and I can say it is my favourite leisure activity. I began listening to music when I was 12 years old. I like listening to the English soul because there are many benefits. Every day, I spend 4-5 minutes listening to English music and it helps me to learn a lot of vocabulary. I often listen some songs such as: on my ways, all falls down… The other reason that I love listening to music is that it makes me feel relax and happy after studying hard. I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening because I can do a lot of things when I stay at home like that: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing day by day so many young people usually stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends on Facebook. Lifestyle now a day is more modern than in the past so many people always spend time enjoying new technology, but I still enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel very happy and peaceful. In my viewpoint, there are positive sides and negative sides, about having leisure time. Let’s begin by looking at the positive side. Firstly, having free time helps people relax and feel happy in their world. Secondly, when they play games online in computer – it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world. On the other hand, having much free time comes with the string of bad point e. G: bore dome, anxiety and even depression. It can lead to bad habit making, lack of focus as well as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids now.
Hello everyone! I’m a beginner in IELTS and I hope all members in the Speaking IELTS group
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in the world after stressful work and study. There are
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ways to entertain like that: listening to
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, reading books, cook
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dishes you like, going to the countryside and visiting relative, hanging out with friends… In my spare hour, I
usually
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and I can say it is my
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leisure activity. I began listening to
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when I was 12 years
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. I like listening to the English soul
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benefits.

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is that it
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me feel relax and happy after studying
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I prefer to stay at home than go out in the evening
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things when I stay at home like that: doing DIY, drawing pictures with my sister. Technology is developing day by day
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young
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stay at home and play game online, chat with their friends on Facebook. Lifestyle
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a day is more modern than in the past
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always spend
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enjoying new technology,
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enjoy going to the countryside and remember my childhood. I feel
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happy and peaceful. In my viewpoint, there are
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sides and
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helps
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relax and feel happy in their world.
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, when they play games online in computer
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it is the place where they can reveal the personality in the virtual world.
On the other hand
, having much free
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point e. G: bore dome, anxiety and even depression. It can lead to
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habit making, lack of focus
as well
as discipline. I wish I would return to my childhood and have fun and healthy as kids
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now
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IELTS letter Describe your leisure time and give opinion about advantages and disadvantages of having too much free time

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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