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Dear Sir, My name is Jyoti Gupta and I am working as a supervisor in the sales department.

Dear Sir, My name is Jyoti Gupta and I am working as a supervisor in the sales department. glEA

Dear Sir, My name is Jyoti Gupta and I am working as a supervisor in the sales department. I am writing to bring to your notice the requirement of a cafeteria within our office building. It’s been two years since I joined this organization and I really admire the work culture here. However, I have always felt that it would be better if we had a place where employees can have tea or meals. After consulting the views of my colleagues and some employees from other departments, I came to know that everyone in the office would like to have this facility in our work area. Furthermore, it will be very beneficial for the individuals who are commuting from far-off places. They would be refreshed and can concentrate more on work after having a relaxing cup of tea. The cafeteria can be built in the backyard of our premises which is a wasteland now. It would be highly appreciable if you look into this matter. Yours sincerely, Jyoti Gupta

Dear Sir,

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IELTS letter Dear Sir, My name is Jyoti Gupta and I am working as a supervisor in the sales department.

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American English

7 paragraphs

168 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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