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COMPUTERS Do you think computers help society? Do you think computers are bad for health? How do you think computers have changed the world?

COMPUTERS Do you think computers help society? Do you think computers are bad for health? How do you think computers have changed the world? AaJ7e
Computers play a major role in the life of every modern person. It can be explained the fact that computers help people to do their work much more easily and quickly. Almost everyone has at least one computer can be used for work, study and communication. Using a computer, you can search something on the internet. I think computers help society in many ways. It made our communication easier and faster. It also helps to be in touch each other and share ideas and experience. We can say computers are bad for our health, but it may be in some cases. For example If you use the computer for a long time, it can be negative for your eyesight and brain. With the advent of computers, our life has changed radically. As I said before, computers have made our life more easily to communicate and do our work faster. Also with the advent of computers, I suppose, in the businesses area and not only it, become easier to calculate the budget of company and much more. After all, computers have become the most useful device for everyone nowadays and it has certainly changed our lives for the better.
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the fact that computers
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people
to do their work much more
easily
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. Almost everyone has at least one computer can be
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used
for work, study and communication. Using a computer, you can search something on the internet.

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think
computers
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society in
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ways. It made our communication easier and faster. It
also
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helps
to be in touch each other and share
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ideas
and experience.

We can say computers are
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bad
for our health,
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it may be in
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cases.
For example
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use
the computer for a long time, it can be
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negative
for your eyesight and brain.

With the advent of computers, our life has
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changed
radically
. As I said
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before
, computers have made our life more
easily
to communicate and do our work faster.
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Also
with the advent of computers, I suppose, in the businesses area and not
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only
it, become easier to calculate the budget of
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company
and much more.

After all
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changed
our
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lives
for the better.

IELTS letter COMPUTERS Do you think computers help society? Do you think computers are bad for health? How do you think computers have changed the world?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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