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As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Philip Jones. I am a final year student of the Department of Public Service and Tourism in the Yerevan State University. In the framework of social survey project we are planning to organize a group visit to the historical exhibition of Traditional Armenian clothing in Tigranakert. I would like to find out the dates of the exhibition, the working hours of the museum and the group discounts available. First, please be so kind to inform the opening and closing dates of the exhibition. This point is very important for us as we must have planed and spread the advertisement at least two weeks before the event date. Second, we need more exact information about the historical period the exhibition covers so that we could present a detailed historical review in our advertisement. Finally, we are interested in the group discounts provided. The group, attending the event, will consist of two classes of seven-grade school students, fourteen and eleven correspondingly in each, four teachers and three accompanying members of our group. We hope that our project will have a great success through our cooperation. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Philip Jones.
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Philip Jones. I am a final year student of the Department of Public Service and Tourism in the Yerevan State University. In the framework of social survey project we are planning to organize a
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visit to the historical exhibition of Traditional Armenian clothing in
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Tigranakert
. I would like to find out the dates of the exhibition, the working hours of the museum and the
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group
discounts available.

First
,
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kind to inform the opening and closing dates of the exhibition. This point is
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for us as we
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have planed and spread the advertisement at least two weeks
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before
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date. Second, we need more exact information about the historical period the exhibition covers
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so
that we could present a detailed historical review in our advertisement.
Finally
, we
are interested
in the
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group
discounts provided. The
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group
, attending the
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event
, will consist of two classes of seven-grade school students, fourteen and eleven
correspondingly
in each, four teachers and three accompanying members of our group.

We hope that our project will have a great success through our cooperation. Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
sincerely
,

Philip Jones.

IELTS letter As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available.

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