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Dear Andrew, My name is Harjeet Kaur. I am writing this email in regards to a job opportunity with your company for the job code - 5829233 (Administration & Operations Assistant). Currently, I am living in India, however I am planning to apply for Canadian Permanent Residency in Saskatchewan for my family. Hence, I am looking for Canadian jobs related to Operations profiles as I have around 12 years of experience working with a multinational company - Fidelity Investments. Would you be able to confirm if I can apply for this position considering I am not in Canada, however, still be interested to know more about this job opportunity and whether I can apply from India or not. Please find attached my resume for your reference. I would look forward to hearing from you soon. RegardsHarjeet Kaur
Dear Andrew,

My name is
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Harjeet
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Kaur
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5829233 (Administration & Operations Assistant).

Currently
, I am living in India,
however
I am planning to apply for Canadian Permanent Residency in Saskatchewan for my family.
Hence
, I am looking for Canadian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
related to Operations profiles as I have around 12 years of experience working with a multinational
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company
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Fidelity Investments.

Would you be able to confirm if I can apply for this position considering I am not in Canada,
however
,
still
be interested
 to know more about this
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job
opportunity and whether I can apply from India or not.

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Please
find attached my resume for your reference. I would look forward to hearing from you
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RegardsHarjeet
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Kaur

IELTS letter Apply for a job in Canada

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6 paragraphs
135 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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