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To enterence to work application

To enterence to work application 7WpEX
Dear sir. I am writing to apply for a job as shop assissent at your supermarket and which I saw advertised today's edition Daily News newspaper. I am thirty four years old but I had never worked as a shop assissent any where before I was confidently say that I can handle this trade. I am sociable, responsible and I can get on well with a new people easily. But I think my ability in sales is good enough. I enjoy severel outdoors activities such as pkaying golf and swimming. If you would like me to attend an interview, I would be able to come at any time convinent to you as I do want to be a member of your team. I looked forward to hearing from you soon. Your fsithfully. Yuldasheva Gavhar
Dear sir. I am writing to apply for a job as shop
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assissent
at your supermarket and which I
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saw
advertised
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today
's edition Daily News newspaper. I am
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thirty four
years
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old
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but
I had never worked as a shop
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assissent
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any where
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before
I was
confidently
say that I can handle this trade.
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I
am sociable, responsible and I can
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get
on well with a new
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people
easily
.
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But
I
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think
my ability in sales is
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good
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enough
. I enjoy
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severel
outdoors activities such as
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pkaying
golf and swimming. If you
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would like
me to attend an interview, I would be able to
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come
at any time
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convinent
to you as I do want to be a member of your team. I looked forward to hearing from you
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soon
. Your
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fsithfully
.
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Yuldasheva
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Gavhar

IELTS letter To enterence to work application

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
133 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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