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Application letter for the position of chef

Application letter for the position of chef oVDJB
Dear Sir/ MadamI am writing to apply for the job of chef which I saw advertised in local internet site "Vacation in Kokand" on Monday, June 15, 2021. I am 37 years old and I have a diploma in cooking. I have 15 years of experience in field of cooking industry. As a proactive worker I am able to handle multiple tasks simultaneously. In addition to experience as a chook, I have an excellent knowledge of baking cakes and breads. Most recently, I worked for "Benazir" baking factory as their chef. While I was here I filled the menu with foreign cuisine. I enjoy several outdoor activities such as playing tennis and riding a horse. If you would like me to attend an interview I would able to come at any time convenient to you as I do want to be a member of your restaurant. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Lola Olimova
Dear Sir/
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MadamI
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am
writing to apply for the job of chef which I
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saw
advertised in local internet site
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Vacation in
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Kokand
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on
The date June 15, 2021 is not a Monday, but a Tuesday.
Monday, June 15, 2021
. I am 37 years
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old
and I have a diploma in cooking. I have 15 years of experience in field of cooking industry.
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As
a proactive worker I am able to handle multiple tasks
simultaneously
.
In addition
to experience as a
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chook
, I have an excellent knowledge of baking cakes and breads. Most recently, I worked for
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"
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Benazir
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"
baking factory as their chef.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
I was here I filled the menu with foreign cuisine. I enjoy several outdoor activities such as playing tennis and riding a horse. If you
Consider removing 'would'. (Usually, 'would' does not occur in a conditional clause, unless to make a request or give a polite order.)
would like
me to attend an interview I
Did you mean "would be able"?
would able
to
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come
at any time convenient to you as I do want to be a member of your restaurant. I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
. Yours
faithfully
, Lola
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Olimova

IELTS letter Application letter for the position of chef

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
157 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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