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An email: A trip to the science museum Your English friend Chris is coming with you and your family to the local museum next Saturday. Write an email to Chris. Tell Chris: how you will travel to the museum what he can see at the museum what he needs to bring.

An email: A trip to the science museum Your English friend Chris is coming with you and your family to the local museum next Saturday. Write an email to Chris. Tell Chris: how you will travel to the museum what he can see at the museum what he needs to bring. oEpnV
Hi Chris, I'm so delighted that you're coming with us to the museum. I'm looking forward to it! I'm going to explain to you what we are going to do there. First, we will wake up early in the morning, after breakfast we will pick you up and we will go to the museum in my father's car. You're going to love the museum, it has different parts such as the fosils area or even an aquarium. Moreover, the museum have various activities to learn more about what we are watching. We are going to pass all day there, so you must bring water and lunch since we are going to eat in the park next to the museum. See you soon, Sam.
Hi Chris,

I'm
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so
delighted that you're coming with us to the
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museum
. I'm looking forward to it!

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
'm going to
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explain
to you what we are going to do there.

First
, we will wake up early in the morning, after breakfast we will pick you
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
up and
we will go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
in my father's car.

You're going to
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love
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
, it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
parts such as the
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fosils
area or even an aquarium.
Moreover
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
have various activities to learn more about what we are watching.

We are going to pass all day there,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
bring water and lunch since we are going to eat in the park
next
to the museum.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
See
you
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soon
, Sam.

IELTS letter An email: A trip to the science museum Your English friend Chris is coming with you and your family to the local museum next Saturday. Write an email to Chris. Tell Chris: how you will travel to the museum what he can see at the museum what he needs to bring.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
123 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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