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Amal and her brother Khaled

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Yesterday I invited my friend Amal to my house, and she brought her younger brother Khaled with her, we had a good time while watching a movie and ate popcorn, and Khaled get a chance to get to know my younger brother Abdullah, Khaled was a very shy boy, he stayed the whole time with his sister and I in the living room, where we watched the movie, he played many rounds with my brother Abdullah, and they had a good time together, same as we. Next time we agreed to meet at their house, and Khaled keep reminding me to bring Abdullah with me, I think they will be a very good friends, and I hope that
Yesterday I invited my friend
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, and she brought her younger brother Khaled with her, we had a
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good
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while watching a movie and ate popcorn, and Khaled
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get
a chance to
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to know my younger brother Abdullah, Khaled was a
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shy boy, he stayed the whole
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with his sister and I in the living room, where we
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watched
the movie, he played
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many
rounds with my brother Abdullah, and they had a
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good
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together, same as we.

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at their
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, and Khaled
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reminding me to bring Abdullah with me, I
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they will be a
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friends, and I hope that
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IELTS letter Amal and her brother Khaled

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  American English
2 paragraphs
117 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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