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advertisement about someone to live with a family and look after their six year old child.

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Dear Mr and Mrs Carolina, My name is Meray Tutlu. I have seen your advertisement in a magazine. Im closely interested with your advertisement. First of all i would like to introduce myself. I am studying at Sydney Univesity Open Education Faculty. Its my second year of the school. So i have so many time to spend for improve to speaking english and earn some money. On my off days i am travelling historical places in Australia, and i am trying local food as much as possible. I have too many job experience with child. I have worked Disneyland for six months last year, and also i have been working at kindergarten for 3 months, however my salary is doesnt satisfy me but i am kind of childlike person, therefore i enjoy on this kind of works. In conclusion from my point of view i am totaly fit for this job. I am so exciting to meet you and spending time with your child. Please note that i have 3 weeks notice period to leave my current job. I am looking forward your kind answer. Please do not hesitate to contact me for any details and question. Kind regards, Meray TUTLU

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