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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview 2bKxw
Dear Sir, My name is Ala, I'm writing this letter concerning a manager position available in your restaurant. I'm from France and graduated in Business administration. Also, I worked in dominos as a senior executive for a year, in my country. As your restaurant standing has always been consistent with top rating among the hotels located in the state. It would be an honor and privilege to work for the restaurant if I was given an opportunity. As far a the professionals are concerned, I have been an outstanding staff in promoting dominos which is located Downtown. And have received many awards for the management skill which I own, as my previous restaurant and their employees vouch for my efficiency in my skills. As a consequence, if I'm considered for the position, I would be extremely grateful, as it has been my dream to work for your esteemed restaurant, and can have a meet-up for the interview by coming Monday. I look forward to your response and thank you in anticipation. your's sincerely, Ala
Dear Sir,

My name is Ala, I'm writing this letter concerning a manager position available in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
. I'm from France and graduated in Business administration.
Also
, I worked in
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "dominoes", the plural form of the noun 'domino'?
dominos
as a senior executive for a year, in my country.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
standing has always been consistent with top rating among the hotels located in the state. It would be an honor and privilege to work for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
if I was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an opportunity.

As far
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "a" or "the" is left.
a the
professionals
are concerned
, I have been an outstanding staff in promoting
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "dominoes", the plural form of the noun 'domino'?
dominos
which
is located
Downtown. And have received
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
awards for the management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
, as my previous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
and their employees vouch for my efficiency in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

As a consequence, if I'm considered for the position, I would be
extremely
grateful, as it has been my dream to work for your esteemed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
, and can have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
-up for the interview by coming Monday.

I look forward to your response and thank you in anticipation.

Did you mean "your" or "yours"?
your's
sincerely
,

Ala
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IELTS letter A restaurant has placed an advertisement for a manager in the local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this job Tell them when you are free to attend an interview

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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