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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter, explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter, explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work 3aap5
Dear Sir, I am John Smith studying at university of Manitoba in the final year of Master of Business Management. I am writing this letter in response of your advertisement in the news paper for the charity work. There are two reasons for participates this volunteering work. The primary one, as I am a student of final year, we have program of internship. Therefore, this short term work will very helpful to me after completion of my course. Furthermore, doing this kind of unpaid work will boost my resume and in the current scenario employer first recruit those candidates who had an experience of volunteering work. Being a student of commerce field, the effective communication is in my blood. Apart from this, I know three international languages such as French, German and English as well as almost five to seven local languages of country India. Therefore, I can communicate with range of visitors who are coming from different nations. I shall join the duty just after two weeks after completion of my third semester exam. After that I have almost a break of 3 to 4 months thus I can serve u till that period. Look for a positive response from your side. Yours Sincerely, John Smith.
Dear Sir,

I am John Smith studying at university of Manitoba in the final year of Master of Business Management. I am writing this letter in response of your advertisement in the
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news paper
for the charity work.

There are two reasons for participates this volunteering
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work
. The primary one, as I am a student of final year, we have program of internship.
Therefore
, this short term
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work
will
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very
helpful to me after completion of my course.
Furthermore
, doing this kind of unpaid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
will boost my resume and in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
scenario employer
first
recruit those candidates who had an experience of volunteering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Being a student of commerce field, the effective communication is in my blood. Apart from this, I know three international languages such as French, German and English
as well
as almost five to seven local languages of country India.
Therefore
, I can communicate with range of visitors who are coming from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
nations.

I shall
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the duty
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
after two weeks after completion of my third semester exam.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
that I have almost a break of 3 to 4 months
thus
I can serve u till that period.

Look for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from your side.

Yours
Sincerely
,

John Smith.

IELTS letter A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter, explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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