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A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, explain what you would like to talk about say why students would be interested in your job suggest a possible date and time for the talk Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, explain what you would like to talk about say why students would be interested in your job suggest a possible date and time for the talk You do NOT need to write any addresses. 7qgA
Dear Sir/Madan, I am writing in response to your advertisement on the daily newspaper to give a speach to the students about the jobs. I am really excited to explain about my job to the students in your college. My name is John Mattews, and, I have worked as Manager in a corprate company for ten years. Our company hiring students who have a sound knowlege in the computer programming language. Recently, we have recruted thousand employees for a role of programmer. If, I get a change to explain the students about the skills sets that they need to improve in order to become the best in the programming language. It would be highly helpful for them during their job interview. Moreover, most of the students want to become a programmer, because of the attractive salary package from the companies in the market. Intereset to meet the students next week inbetween Monday to Friday 10. 00 AM to explain in details about the roles and responsiblity of a programmer in the market. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, John Mattews
Dear Sir/
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Madan
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speach
to the
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students
about the jobs. I am
really
excited to
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explain
about my job to the
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students
in your college.

My name is John
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Mattews
, and, I have worked as Manager in a
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corprate
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company
for ten years. Our
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company
hiring
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students
who have a sound
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knowlege
in the computer programming language. Recently, we have
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recruted
thousand employees for a role of programmer.
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get
a
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change
to
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explain
the
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students
about the
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skills
sets that they need to
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improve
in order to become the best in the programming language. It would be
highly
helpful for them during their job interview.
Moreover
, most of the
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students
want to become a programmer,
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because
of the attractive salary package from the
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companies
in the market.

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Intereset
to
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meet
the
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students
next
week
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inbetween
Monday to Friday 10. 00 AM to
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explain
in
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details
about the roles and
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responsiblity
of a programmer in the market.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

John
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Mattews

IELTS letter A local college wants people with a job to come and talk to students about what it is like to work. You would like to come forward and talk to the students about your job. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter, explain what you would like to talk about say why students would be interested in your job suggest a possible date and time for the talk You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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181 words
6.0
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