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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. 3pOm
Dear Sir/Ma, I am writing to you check for availability and price of the items listed below. -65inches 2021 LG Curved Screen Television -LG 100W 2020 Sound System -LG Rechargeable Standing Fan. I am currently in Agbara Local Government which is 80KM from your store. In preparation for the December feast, I would be needing this item in the next three (3) Weeks. The needs for these items are not urgent but time bound, so I require you write back to me as soon as possible. I look forward to a response to this letter informing the availability, cost, and if they can be kept in your store till I am in the country in three weeks. However, I understand if some or all are not available can you kindly order from your supplier on my behalf and inform if delivery can happen with the stipulated time. Looking forward to hearing from you soon with all required information Thank You. Kind Regards, Ahmed Ojodu.
Dear Sir/Ma,

I am writing to you
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check
for availability and price of the items listed below.

-
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65inches
2021 LG Curved Screen Television

-LG 100W 2020 Sound System

-LG Rechargeable Standing Fan.

I am
currently
in
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Agbara
Local
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Government
which is 80KM from your store. In preparation for the December feast, I would
The verb 'needing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
be needing
this item in the
next
three (3) Weeks. The needs for these items are not urgent
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but
time bound,
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so
I require you write back to me as
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soon
as possible.

I look forward to a response to this letter informing the availability, cost, and if they can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in your store till I am in the country in three weeks.

However
, I understand if
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
or all are not available can you kindly order from your supplier on my behalf and inform if delivery can happen with the stipulated time.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
with all required information

Thank You.

Kind Regards,

Ahmed
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Ojodu
.

IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Letter
  American English
10 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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