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A letter to manufacture Co.

A letter to manufacture Co. Nl06N
Dear sir. Tomas. I am writing to you to ask to arrange a new sewing machine to our workers. The reason for asking about them our workers are more than limit and they need machines for each of them. We are going to make new styled clothes for next week's show. We have talented stylists who can make modern fashions for women. Last year we won the first place at modern fashions week's and got some machines for the gift. In order to develop our business we need modern, but cheaper machines. I hope you will be able to arrange our demandsWe planned to make clothes for parties, weddings, formal clothes, informal, sports, and uniforms. We will be happy to help people with our products. We're waiting for good message from your Company. Your faithfulness Sandra.
Dear sir. Tomas. I am writing to you to ask to arrange a new sewing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machine
to our workers. The reason for asking about them our workers are more than
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
limit and
they need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machines
for each of them. We are going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
new styled clothes for
next
week's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
. We have talented stylists who can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
modern fashions for women. Last year we won the
first
place at modern
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fashions
week's and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machines
for the gift. In order to develop our business we need modern,
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but
cheaper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machines
. I hope you will be able to arrange our
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demandsWe
planned to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
clothes for parties, weddings, formal clothes, informal, sports, and uniforms. We will be happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with our products. We're waiting for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
message from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
. Your faithfulness Sandra.

IELTS letter A letter to manufacture Co.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
136 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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