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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you this letter regarding the feedback that you were asking for in which you demand to choose between sponsoring local children’s sports team or to pay for two open-air concerts. Firstly, I want to thank you for your decision towards this matter, sponsoring has enourmous benefits especially for yougsters of our area who struggle to practice sports. In my opinion, sponsoring local children’s sports team will help them to obtain sports equipment to improve their skills. Moreover, Sponsoring will let them focus on their profesionalism rather than financial problems, Not only this but also, your company can benefit from the link between highly skilled players in the future which is important for advertising. Secondly, I think that sponsoring children’s local sports is extremly crucial than paying for two open-air concerts that can only lasts for a few days and will probably not solve children’s problems, even parents will be very glad to see their yougsters practicing sports in their free time which is essential for their well-being instead of assisting concerts. To conlude, In my humble opinion I think that helping children is more important than concerts, because we should help the future generations to rise in a better way.

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