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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's support team for 2 years or to pay for two open air concerts. it has ask for feedback from the general public

Dear sir I am the Council of this city. I'm writing this letter for your company about sponsoring air concert and support for local children in my area. Also I want to thanks to you for your activities in my city. Your methods are very important to grows the local children's support in the future. lf this children support from a sponsors they will be useful in team and they can progress in there sport life. On the other hand, we don't have any air consert in this area. so people had to travel to another city for seeing concert of artists. I would like to help your plan in this way, I think maybe my suggest is useful for you. As you know, Facilities in the sport center are very old. therefore, If you could spend money for buying some facilities Such as, sport's ball, shoes and clothes and some equipment for gymnastic. local people have considere to offer places in the countryside for opening suitable concert place. Because of we don't have free area in the city for concert. people can help to your goals. I hope to hear from you regarding this matter as soon as possible. thank you your sincerely John

Dear sir I am the Council of this city. I'm writing this letter for your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 about sponsoring air You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgigmusicalrecitalshow
concert
 and support for local children in my area. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 I want to thanks to you for your activities in my city. Your methods are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to grows the local children's support in the future. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Lf
lf
‘This’ does not seem to match the plural noun ‘children’. Did you mean “these”?these
this
 children support from The plural noun “sponsors” cannot be used with the article “a”. Did you mean “a sponsor” or “sponsors”?a sponsorsponsors
a sponsors
 they will be useful in Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).team, and
team and
 they can progress in there sport life. On the other hand
, we don't have any air Possible spelling mistake found.concertconvertconsentconsort
consert
 in this area. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.So
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 had to travel to another city for seeing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgigmusicalrecitalshow
concert
 of artists. I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 your plan in this way, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 maybe my suggest is useful for you. As you know, Facilities in the sport center are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Therefore
therefore
, If you could spend money for buying This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 facilities Such as, sport's ball, shoes and clothes and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 equipment for gymnastic. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Local
local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have Possible spelling mistake found.consideredconsiderconsiders
considere
 to offer places in the countryside for opening suitable You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgigmusicalrecitalshow
concert
 place. Probable usage error. Use “Because we” instead.Because we
Because of we
 don't have free area in the city for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgigmusicalrecitalshow
concert
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.People
people
 can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to your goals. I hope to hear from you regarding this matter as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as possible. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Thank
thank
 you your sincerely
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.John.John!John?John:John,John;
John