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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear sir, This letter is to explain regarding the cover we had on our flight to Dubai wherein, you explained me about your different restaurants. On the same day you also asked me to contact you about any job that I might be interested in. Honestly, I don’t have much experience in this field on the contrary I think I can do the work of front office or any job of the management. I have one year experience of working as an HR Manager. I have excellent management skills and I am very good at communicating to people, you might have noticed it during our journey. Therefore, I hope you remember me, it was on the 1st of February and we were on seat 28 F and 28 E. Consequently, I desperately need a job right now as owing to COVID my previous job is on hold and I don’t have work now. I believe my interactive skills will really help to promote one of your chain of restaurants for this reason, I want to be part of your esteemed ownership and contribute to its growth. Thankyou for giving this matter your attention and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Jack
Dear sir,

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regarding the cover we had on our flight to Dubai wherein, you
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explained
me about your
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different
restaurants.

On the same day you
also
asked me to contact you about any
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job
that I might
be interested
in.
Honestly
, I don’t have much experience in this field
on the contrary
I
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think
I can do the work of front office or any
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job
of the management. I have one year experience of working as an HR Manager. I have excellent management
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skills and
I am
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very
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good
at communicating to
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people
, you might have noticed it during our journey.
Therefore
, I hope you remember me, it was on the 1st of
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February and
we were on seat 28 F and 28 E.

Consequently
, I
desperately
need a
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job
right
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now
as owing to
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COVID
my previous
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job
is on hold and I don’t have work
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now
. I believe my interactive
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skills
will
really
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help
to promote one of your chain of restaurants
for this reason
, I want to be part of your esteemed ownership and contribute to its growth.

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Thankyou
for giving this matter your attention and I hope to hear from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
Jack
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IELTS letter During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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