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Your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit. Write to the museum. In your letter – Tell them what you liked and what you didn’t like – Make some suggestions for improvement – Describe some other exhibits you would like to see

Dear Mr. Johnson, I have been asked by your office to write to you regarding your museum with some points of view about my recent visit. I would like to say first of all that I think you have done an excellent job modernizing the place, and I have recommend it as a day trip to a number of friends. The layout of the building is bright and inviting, and the items you have on display are well laid out. However, I do feel that some of the exhibits could have been more clearly labeled, with some additional details about where they were discovered and what they would have been used for. Some of the displays my son and I were looking at were a little confusing. I would also be very interested to see artifacts that may be available from other cultures. I am particularly interested in Egyptian history, for example, and would certainly come again if there were any displays like that. Thanks for your interest in my feedback. Yours sincerely Ravinder
Dear Mr. Johnson,

I have
been asked
by your office to write to you regarding your museum with
some
points of view about my recent visit.

I would like to say
first
of all that I
think
you have done an excellent job modernizing the place, and I have
recommend
it as a day trip to a number of friends. The layout of the building is bright and inviting, and the items you have on display are well laid out.

However
, I do feel that
some of the
exhibits could have been more
clearly
labeled, with
some
additional
details
about where they
were discovered
and what they would have been
used
for.
Some of the
displays my son and I were looking at were a
little
confusing.

I would
also
be
very
interested to
see
artifacts that may be available from other cultures. I am
particularly
interested in Egyptian history,
for example
, and would
certainly
come
again if there were any displays like that.

Thanks for your interest in my feedback.

Yours
sincerely


Ravinder
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IELTS letter Your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit. Write to the museum. In your letter – Tell them what you liked and what you didn’t like – Make some suggestions for improvement – Describe some other exhibits you would like to see

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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