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A friend of yours, who has been living in another country for some time is going to visit you for a week. Write a letter suggesting what you might do together and what sights you might visit.

A friend of yours, who has been living in another country for some time is going to visit you for a week. Write a letter suggesting what you might do together and what sights you might visit. mXwnL
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction at the disgraceful treatment. I was go to the shopping and I wanted to get a phone call. My phone was not good working. I bought a new phone from assistant on your shop yesterday morning. Then I know that was broken as I went home. I paid 300$ for this phone. Then I went again and met with your assistant. I asked she give me it, but she did not want give my money back and she spoke impolitely to me. I was angry with her. I insist on a full refund. I am very upset with her and I wish you to punish him. She could have been a good man but her treatment was very bad. I demand immediate replacement. I am writing an apology from the local manager or else I shall be forced to take further action. I think you understand me. I expect to hear from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Karmen Kartes
Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction at the disgraceful treatment. I was
Consider using a past participle here: "gone".
go
to the shopping and I wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
call. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
was not
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good
working. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
from assistant on your shop yesterday morning. Then I know that
was broken
as I went home. I paid
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$300".
300$
for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
. Then I went again and met with your assistant. I asked she
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gives", "gave".
give
me it,
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but
she did not want give my money
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
back and
she spoke
impolitely
to me. I was angry with her.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
insist on a full refund.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
upset with her and I wish you to punish him. She could have been a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
her treatment was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
. I demand immediate replacement. I am writing an apology from the local manager or else I shall
be forced
to take
further
action.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you understand me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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expect
to hear from you as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Karmen
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Kartes
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IELTS letter A friend of yours, who has been living in another country for some time is going to visit you for a week. Write a letter suggesting what you might do together and what sights you might visit.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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