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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer b1BP
Dear Joe, I hope this letter will find you well. I am writing this letter to provide you my advice regarding whether you should go for camping holidays or not. I would say these sorts of holidays will bring you close to the nature as you have to visit the mountains. Moreover, this would be give you a opportunity to spend some time with your family. However, I would say there are some drawbacks of camping. Firstly, I believe you have to travel a lot. In addition to that you have to spend more money on different types of instruments of camping. As far my concern to join you in this adventurous activity, I am very busy in my office work, but I would try to convince my supervisor for a leave. I hope this letter will help you to make decision. Regards, Jaspal
Dear Joe,

I hope this letter will find you well. I am writing this letter to provide you my advice regarding whether you should go for camping holidays or not.
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I
would say these sorts of holidays will bring you close to the nature as you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
visit the mountains.
Moreover
, this would be give you
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a
opportunity to spend
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some
time with your family.

However
, I would say there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks of camping.
Firstly
, I believe you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
travel a lot.
In addition
to that you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend more money on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of instruments of camping.

As far my concern to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you in this adventurous activity, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
busy in my office work,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I would try to convince my supervisor for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
.

I hope this letter will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decision.

Regards,
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Jaspal

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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  American English
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143 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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