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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer XBj8
Dear Joe, I hope you are doing well. I’m writing with regard to your upcoming camping vacation. I believe you will have a great time camping. I know you’re a big fan of the outdoors and camping is the truly best way to experience nature. That area you planning to go to is renowned for its wide range of flora and fauna. This type of holiday is not without its drawbacks. The main one is that you need to do a lot of preparation and make sure that you don’t forget any essential items. On top of this, the isolated location means that you’re going to have to cook all your own food because there are no restaurants nearby. I really wish that I could join you, but as you know summer is my busy season. I must keep my nose to the grindstone and wait until winter before I can take a holiday. Please let me know if you’ve got any more questions. Best regards, Mike
Dear Joe,

I hope you are doing well. I’m writing with regard to your upcoming camping vacation.

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believe you will have a great time camping.
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know you’re a
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fan of the outdoors and camping is the
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truly best
way to experience nature. That area
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you planning
to go to
is renowned
for its wide range of flora and fauna.

This type of holiday is not without its drawbacks. The main one is that you need to do
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a lot of
preparation and
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make
sure that you don’t forget any essential items. On top of this, the isolated location means that you’re going to
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have to
cook all your
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own
food
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there are no restaurants nearby.

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really
wish that I could
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join
you,
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as you know summer is my busy season. I
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must
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my nose to the grindstone and wait until winter
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before
I can take a holiday.

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me know if you’ve
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any more questions.

Best regards,

Mike

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible disadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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166 words
6.0
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