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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends. To what extend do you agree?

With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends. bYYyP

Dear Mam, I am Saba a student from evening batch of the course " 3 months - Advanced Financial skills". I am writing this letter to inform you about discontinuation of the course. As you must be aware that am currently working as full-time employee in a bank, which is from 9 am to 6 pm now. Also, presently the workload is drastically increased due to the merger of City bank with Canara bank and the banks have limits the staff, thus most of the time I must stretch my shift to accomplish the assigned tasks. As I cannot compromise on my job, I need to discontinue the course. I would like to join this course again when workloads are under controlled. I would request you to please return my 2 months fees. It would be really appreciated if you will do it within 2-3 working days. Yours Sincerely, Saba

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must
 stretch my shift to accomplish the assigned tasks. As I cannot compromise on my job, I need to discontinue the course.

I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 this course again when workloads are under controlled. I would request you to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
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It would be really
 appreciated if you will do it within 2-3 working days.

Yours Sincerely
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Saba

IELTS letter With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always make new friends.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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