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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Dear Julie, Hope you are well! It was so great hearing you after such a long time. I am honored that you are asking me for advice on whether to camping or not, as you know I am an avid camper and I go camping frequently. I am positively sure that you would enjoy camping in Laqlouq’s forest, one of reasons why I believe that going camping is for you is, first of all, the views there are spectacular I think the main point of any outdoor activity is the views of nature in all its glory and in the second place is the fresh air, you can’t get that in the city. Another advantage is the starry night you may experience if it’s not cloudy, just think of sleeping under a blanket of stars. Well I don’t think it can get better than that. While all these points clearly paints you a pretty picture, one of the main disadvantages drawbacks tat you may encounter, is the weather it is so unpredictable you can’t know if you will have clear sky or a cloudy day, it’s all up to chance. Furthermore, be on the lookout for any wild animals, do not engage and leave food laying around, just be careful. Unfortunately, this time around I can’t go with you to Laqlouq as my husband and I have already booked a trip to visit his family in Italy. Maybe next time we’ll all go there again. I look forward to hear from you about your new adventure in the camping world. Warm wishes, Caroline

Dear Julie,

Hope you are well!

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so
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clear
 sky or a cloudy day, it’s all up to chance. Furthermore
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leave
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just
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 as my husband and I have already booked a trip to visit his family in Italy. Maybe next
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to hear
 from you about your new adventure in the camping world.

Warm wishes,

Caroline

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Letter

American English

9 paragraphs

262 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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