Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

A family member recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting. Write an email: Encouraging the young couple in their role as new parents. Explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers. Offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)

A family member recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting. Write an email: Encouraging the young couple in their role as new parents. Explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers. Offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc. ) 56k3D
Hi Amanda and James, Many congratulations for the new role as parents and welcome the newborn child. I am sure this must have added a plethora of responsibilities in your daily routine. From feeding to changing clothes and sleepless nights, many things will be different now. When Sam was born, we faced the same situation, however, things were manageable when we divided the work among ourselves. From my personal experience I have seen that Sam has a great interest in old music just like his father. So I believe we are the best advisors for our children and play a pivotal role in their upbringing. Though it’s a new experience for both of you, I am sure you will get used to it very soon. If you need some help, you can also reach out to Sarya baby care center in the vicinity of your house. They offer lessons on different ways to bring up your child. Additionally, they provide babysitters who could take care of the child when Amanda will start working again. Not to forget, I am a call away for any suggestion needed. Hope my advice would be useful to you and many congratulations once again. With Love, Emma
Hi Amanda and James,

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
congratulations
The correct preposition here is "on".
for
the new role as parents and welcome the newborn child. I am sure this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
a plethora of responsibilities in your daily routine. From feeding to changing clothes and sleepless nights,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. When Sam
was born
, we faced the same situation,
however
, things were manageable when we divided the work among ourselves.

From my personal experience I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that Sam has a great interest in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
music
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
like his father.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I believe we are the best advisors for our children and play a pivotal role in their upbringing.

Though it’s a new experience for both of you, I am sure you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. If you need
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
, you can
also
reach out to
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sarya
baby care center in the vicinity of your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. They offer lessons on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways to bring up your child.
Additionally
, they provide babysitters who could take care of the child when Amanda will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
working again. Not to forget, I am a call away for any suggestion needed.

Hope my advice would be useful to you and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
congratulations once again.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Love
,

Emma

IELTS letter A family member recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting. Write an email: Encouraging the young couple in their role as new parents. Explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers. Offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc. )

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • A family member recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting. Write an email: Encouraging the young couple in their role as new parents. Explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers. Offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)