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You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want an- other. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place

You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want an- other. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place PVkWX
Dear Vanessa, Thank you for allowing me to take the ‘French for Sales Staff’ course with Multi- Lingua last week. It was extremely useful and I learnt a lot, not only in terms of vocabulary and grammar, but also linguistic style. It was a great opportunity to swap experiences with sales staff from other companies and industries too. As I mentioned when I first asked to take the course, I think that one week of study is not going to be enough in order to make sure that my French is at the required level, so I would like to apply to take the advanced course which takes place from 20th to 25th February at the same location in Swindon. Since this course finishes just before we begin the big sales push in France, I think that this would be perfect timing. We still have enough money in the budget to cover the cost of the course and I was able to handle my workload whilst taking the intermediate course. Best regards, Jessica
Dear Vanessa,

Thank you for allowing me to take the ‘French for Sales Staff’
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course
with Multi-

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Lingua
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last week
. It was
extremely
useful and I
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learnt
a lot, not
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only
in terms
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of


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vocabulary
and grammar,
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but
also
linguistic style. It was a great opportunity
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to


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swap
experiences with sales staff from other
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companies
and industries too.

As I mentioned when I
first
asked to take the
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course
, I
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think
that one week of study is not going to be
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enough
in order to
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make
sure that my French is at the required level,
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so
I would like to apply to take the advanced
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course
which takes place from 20th to 25th February at the same location in
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Swindon
. Since this
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course
finishes
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just
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before
we
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begin
the
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big
sales push in France, I
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think
that this would be perfect timing.

We
still
have
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enough
money in the budget to cover the cost of the
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course and
I was able to handle my workload whilst taking the intermediate course.

Best regards,

Jessica
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IELTS letter You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want an- other. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place

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