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A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. v.1

A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. v. 1
Dear Samir, Hope you are doing great. I cannot find fitting words to express how excited I am to hear that you will be visiting me next week. I am very much looking forward to having you and spending some quality time together. Unfortunately, on 7th June, the day of your arrival, I have an important meeting in my office and I am expected there early in the morning. I wish I could have been at the train station to receive you. However, do not worry, I will keep the keys to my neighbour, George. He lives in the opposite apartment- B2 and will be expecting you at around 9: 30 am. Just tell him that you are my cousin Samir and he will hand over you the keys. From the train station, you can hail a taxi and give him my apartment's address. He will do the rest as the address is quite familiar to taxi drivers. The rent should be anything between 15 to 20 pounds. I will be back at 6. 30 pm and will take you to dinner at one of my favourite restaurants. Afterwards, we can walk for a few minutes and meet aunt Lucy who lives nearby. I have so many things to share with you and I plan to do many exciting things together, just like the days in our childhood! Wishing you a safe journey. Best wishes, James
Dear Samir,

Hope you are doing great. I cannot find fitting words to express how excited I am to hear that you will be visiting me
next
week. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much looking forward to having you and spending
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time together.

Unfortunately, on 7th June, the day of your arrival, I have an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
meeting in my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
office and
I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
there early in the morning. I wish I could have been at the train station to receive you.
However
, do not worry, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the keys to my
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbour' is British English.
neighbour
, George. He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in the opposite apartment- B2 and will be expecting you at around 9: 30 am.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
him that you are my cousin
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Samir and
he will hand over you the keys.

From the train station, you can hail a taxi and give him my apartment's address. He will do the rest as the address is quite familiar to taxi drivers. The rent should be anything
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 15 and 20".
between 15 to 20
pounds.

I will be back at 6. 30 pm and will take you to dinner at one of my
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
restaurants. Afterwards, we can walk for a few minutes and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
aunt Lucy who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
nearby.

I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things to share with you and I plan to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
exciting things together,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
like the days in our childhood! Wishing you a safe journey.

Best wishes,

James
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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