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A family has an advertisement in Australian magazine that they require someone for 6 months to look after their 6 year old child.

A family has an advertisement in Australian magazine that they require someone for 6 months to look after their 6 year old child. G90px

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the advertisement you had published two days back in IIO Australian Magazine. It was regarding a position as an in-house nanny for your six year old kid for a period of six months. I feel I am the right candidate for this vacancy you have posted as I am reliable, patient and adore being around children. I have previous experience with 6 families who have lived in different parts of the country. They would definitely vouch for my skills and character. Furthermore, I have recently completed my graduation in Child care and counseling along with a certificate course on first aid. This opportunity if given opens up doors for me to explore the divers culture and make new friends during my leisure time. Hoping to hear from you soon. I mentioned my telephone number if further information is required. Yours sincerelySwetha Pai

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IELTS letter A family has an advertisement in Australian magazine that they require someone for 6 months to look after their 6 year old child.

Letter

American English

2 paragraphs

153 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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